I love the slow character building as you continue to weave newcomers in with the old . The pale yellow house acts like a sculpture’s lump of clay. It takes in that which makes it stronger.
More characters ‘molded’ in as the story shapes and forms.
“There are so many deep truths in the world that can never be said, never be explained, they can only ever be felt and known. “
Your writing, always a pleasure to read .
In this; “ entertaining snow globe of words”.
(Only a father can flit in and out of the mundane conversations surrounding shopping…)
Ha ha I'm an expert conversational flitter alright :)
I really like the idea of a "sculptors lump of clay," that's such a good description of what writing this series feels like, molding and forming the clay to slowly reveal shapes and relationships. Thanks Lor, I'll keep that idea in mind.
I hear the murmuration of memories zooming through the pale yellowish house, and see the chalk-dust, of running shoes treading on what's true in 'the me' in you, obscure feelings that couldn't be felt before.
Thanks so much for reading and making all those connections Okeko! I'm so honoured and grateful. I know I say this all the time but seriously, thanks :)
Good writing, Jonathan. I do wonder at the paralleling of these two story lines. One, about the once famous singer and the other about shopping with someone who doesn't like shopping. Can you explain the connection? Sometimes I am slow on the uptake. Thanks Wes
Thanks Wes. My thinking is this; in the first few stories I'll introduce various characters, each with characteristics that represent various issues or values of wider society. So there's Jussi, a man in need of care and a symbol of how societies treat the powerless.
There's Ronny, a man who is egocentric, yet broken, flirting with fame and yearning to return to "fame", with the concept of fame representing an intrinsic part of the way that the market works to encourage the acceptance of "super-people" who thrive in an unfair hierarchy.
There's Johnny Hardbread and his colleagues who are in perpetual conflict with each other and their customers, who are representative of the way the market treats both workers and citizens. There's the hairdresser who is symbolic of human kindness and artistic flair etc. etc.
As the Pale Yellow House series progresses, each of these characters (and more) will weave in and out of each others lives, giving me the chance to play with the human characters and the wider issues and values of current society.
So, (sorry for being so long-winded), the yet unmet daughter is symbolic of the a resistance to the values of consumerism which are all pervasive and encourage the creation of identity through consumption of goods. Whilst Ronny, with his broken desire for legitimacy through fame, is symbolic of the way fame is used to create desire and identity. These two charaters are at odds really.
But, your not being slow on the uptake, because there's no reason why you'd get the relationship between these two (Ronny and the unseen daughter) yet. I'm thinking I'll expand on these themes later. But I did manufacture the juxtaposition of Ronny's egocentric self awareness and "Anna and I's" indifference, they can't remember his name, they're mostly talking about shopping whilst only secondarily concerned with him, "I" see's Ronny's interior struggles rather than his exterior facade etc. etc.
Hopefully these themes will blossom as the series progresses, but also hopefully it's just a pleasure to read the writing, like an entertaining snow globe of words :)
Very good, Jonathan. I could have said “it’s a pleasure to read the writing” which is true enough for me to want to have further idea where this might be headed. I’m glad to hear it’s part of a bigger project. Look forward to it.
I love the slow character building as you continue to weave newcomers in with the old . The pale yellow house acts like a sculpture’s lump of clay. It takes in that which makes it stronger.
More characters ‘molded’ in as the story shapes and forms.
“There are so many deep truths in the world that can never be said, never be explained, they can only ever be felt and known. “
Your writing, always a pleasure to read .
In this; “ entertaining snow globe of words”.
(Only a father can flit in and out of the mundane conversations surrounding shopping…)
Ha ha I'm an expert conversational flitter alright :)
I really like the idea of a "sculptors lump of clay," that's such a good description of what writing this series feels like, molding and forming the clay to slowly reveal shapes and relationships. Thanks Lor, I'll keep that idea in mind.
I hear the murmuration of memories zooming through the pale yellowish house, and see the chalk-dust, of running shoes treading on what's true in 'the me' in you, obscure feelings that couldn't be felt before.
Thanks so much for reading and making all those connections Okeko! I'm so honoured and grateful. I know I say this all the time but seriously, thanks :)
Good writing, Jonathan. I do wonder at the paralleling of these two story lines. One, about the once famous singer and the other about shopping with someone who doesn't like shopping. Can you explain the connection? Sometimes I am slow on the uptake. Thanks Wes
Thanks Wes. My thinking is this; in the first few stories I'll introduce various characters, each with characteristics that represent various issues or values of wider society. So there's Jussi, a man in need of care and a symbol of how societies treat the powerless.
There's Ronny, a man who is egocentric, yet broken, flirting with fame and yearning to return to "fame", with the concept of fame representing an intrinsic part of the way that the market works to encourage the acceptance of "super-people" who thrive in an unfair hierarchy.
There's Johnny Hardbread and his colleagues who are in perpetual conflict with each other and their customers, who are representative of the way the market treats both workers and citizens. There's the hairdresser who is symbolic of human kindness and artistic flair etc. etc.
As the Pale Yellow House series progresses, each of these characters (and more) will weave in and out of each others lives, giving me the chance to play with the human characters and the wider issues and values of current society.
So, (sorry for being so long-winded), the yet unmet daughter is symbolic of the a resistance to the values of consumerism which are all pervasive and encourage the creation of identity through consumption of goods. Whilst Ronny, with his broken desire for legitimacy through fame, is symbolic of the way fame is used to create desire and identity. These two charaters are at odds really.
But, your not being slow on the uptake, because there's no reason why you'd get the relationship between these two (Ronny and the unseen daughter) yet. I'm thinking I'll expand on these themes later. But I did manufacture the juxtaposition of Ronny's egocentric self awareness and "Anna and I's" indifference, they can't remember his name, they're mostly talking about shopping whilst only secondarily concerned with him, "I" see's Ronny's interior struggles rather than his exterior facade etc. etc.
Hopefully these themes will blossom as the series progresses, but also hopefully it's just a pleasure to read the writing, like an entertaining snow globe of words :)
Very good, Jonathan. I could have said “it’s a pleasure to read the writing” which is true enough for me to want to have further idea where this might be headed. I’m glad to hear it’s part of a bigger project. Look forward to it.